Re: Show Me Your Music! (I'll give you my honest opinion!)

Sun 10 Feb 2013 - 1:41

brantonio333 wrote:Hey, could you please critique my flow and lyrics?
It's highly inspired by Hopsin, and there's a line that might be too close to one of Hopsin's lines but I'll change it eventually. Thanks

https://soundcloud.com/aabrant/preview-untitled-song-that

Pretty braggy but there's nothing really wrong with that, your flow/lyrics are fine but don't say nigga. It won't get you anywhere lol. You need to work on delivery and your voice imo, it sounds like you have a blocked nose or something.

Sun 10 Feb 2013 - 1:59

semaj116 wrote:

brantonio333 wrote:Hey, could you please critique my flow and lyrics?
It's highly inspired by Hopsin, and there's a line that might be too close to one of Hopsin's lines but I'll change it eventually. Thanks

https://soundcloud.com/aabrant/preview-untitled-song-that

Pretty braggy but there's nothing really wrong with that, your flow/lyrics are fine but don't say nigga. It won't get you anywhere lol. You need to work on delivery and your voice imo, it sounds like you have a blocked nose or something.

Sun 10 Feb 2013 - 2:58

semaj116 wrote:

brantonio333 wrote:Hey, could you please critique my flow and lyrics?
It's highly inspired by Hopsin, and there's a line that might be too close to one of Hopsin's lines but I'll change it eventually. Thanks

https://soundcloud.com/aabrant/preview-untitled-song-that

Pretty braggy but there's nothing really wrong with that, your flow/lyrics are fine but don't say nigga. It won't get you anywhere lol. You need to work on delivery and your voice imo, it sounds like you have a blocked nose or something.

could you have a listen to my song bro and tell me what you think?

Sun 10 Feb 2013 - 3:07

fxtdiilz wrote:

semaj116 wrote:

brantonio333 wrote:Hey, could you please critique my flow and lyrics?
It's highly inspired by Hopsin, and there's a line that might be too close to one of Hopsin's lines but I'll change it eventually. Thanks

https://soundcloud.com/aabrant/preview-untitled-song-that

Pretty braggy but there's nothing really wrong with that, your flow/lyrics are fine but don't say nigga. It won't get you anywhere lol. You need to work on delivery and your voice imo, it sounds like you have a blocked nose or something.

could you have a listen to my song bro and tell me what you think?

sure, you can obviously rhyme but again i think you need to work on voice/delivery. In this your voice is pretty soft, and that works for some people (mac miller etc) but it kinda sounds like you're whispering. Also, idk, saying this isn't about you makes it come across kinda insincere or whatever but yeah that's that i guess. if you get time it'd be cool if you could check out the tracks i posted in audio stage, trying to hear some opinions on them haha

oh also that chorus hurts a little :)

Sun 10 Feb 2013 - 3:33

semaj116 wrote:

fxtdiilz wrote:

semaj116 wrote:

brantonio333 wrote:Hey, could you please critique my flow and lyrics?
It's highly inspired by Hopsin, and there's a line that might be too close to one of Hopsin's lines but I'll change it eventually. Thanks

https://soundcloud.com/aabrant/preview-untitled-song-that

Pretty braggy but there's nothing really wrong with that, your flow/lyrics are fine but don't say nigga. It won't get you anywhere lol. You need to work on delivery and your voice imo, it sounds like you have a blocked nose or something.

could you have a listen to my song bro and tell me what you think?

sure, you can obviously rhyme but again i think you need to work on voice/delivery. In this your voice is pretty soft, and that works for some people (mac miller etc) but it kinda sounds like you're whispering. Also, idk, saying this isn't about you makes it come across kinda insincere or whatever but yeah that's that i guess. if you get time it'd be cool if you could check out the tracks i posted in audio stage, trying to hear some opinions on them haha

oh also that chorus hurts a little :)

yea bro well was a soft song so had to put on a soft voice, but towards the end got bit more anger in it. i already checked your music out bro, pretty sure i messaged you my thoughts on it lol

p.s to buddie. HURRY UP AND GET ON HERE TO CHECK OUT THESE SONGS lol

Sun 10 Feb 2013 - 3:40

fxtdiilz wrote:

semaj116 wrote:

fxtdiilz wrote:

semaj116 wrote:

brantonio333 wrote:Hey, could you please critique my flow and lyrics?
It's highly inspired by Hopsin, and there's a line that might be too close to one of Hopsin's lines but I'll change it eventually. Thanks

https://soundcloud.com/aabrant/preview-untitled-song-that

Pretty braggy but there's nothing really wrong with that, your flow/lyrics are fine but don't say nigga. It won't get you anywhere lol. You need to work on delivery and your voice imo, it sounds like you have a blocked nose or something.

could you have a listen to my song bro and tell me what you think?

sure, you can obviously rhyme but again i think you need to work on voice/delivery. In this your voice is pretty soft, and that works for some people (mac miller etc) but it kinda sounds like you're whispering. Also, idk, saying this isn't about you makes it come across kinda insincere or whatever but yeah that's that i guess. if you get time it'd be cool if you could check out the tracks i posted in audio stage, trying to hear some opinions on them haha

oh also that chorus hurts a little :)

yea bro well was a soft song so had to put on a soft voice, but towards the end got bit more anger in it. i already checked your music out bro, pretty sure i messaged you my thoughts on it lol

p.s to buddie. HURRY UP AND GET ON HERE TO CHECK OUT THESE SONGS lol

Haha yeah you did but I posted two new ones if you wanna check them out

Sat 23 Feb 2013 - 1:08

Thanks everyone, It was nice to get some feedback. I will check out some of your guys music you posted.

Sat 23 Feb 2013 - 3:04

brantonio333 wrote:Hey, could you please critique my flow and lyrics?
It's highly inspired by Hopsin, and there's a line that might be too close to one of Hopsin's lines but I'll change it eventually. Thanks

https://soundcloud.com/aabrant/preview-untitled-song-that

Your voice sounds like a cartoonist mobster.

Wed 27 Feb 2013 - 7:18

https://soundcloud.com/renin95/mhh-cypher-11 blow, knocked this out quickly. still working on quality but the CO1U arrived (thanks buddie)

Wed 27 Feb 2013 - 9:02

semaj116 wrote:https://soundcloud.com/renin95/mhh-cypher-11 blow, knocked this out quickly. still working on quality but the CO1U arrived (thanks buddie)

Your flow & voice remind me a lot of Illy, good shit.

Wed 27 Feb 2013 - 11:02

Perfect Stranger wrote:

semaj116 wrote:https://soundcloud.com/renin95/mhh-cypher-11 blow, knocked this out quickly. still working on quality but the CO1U arrived (thanks buddie)

Your flow & voice remind me a lot of Illy, good shit.

Hahaha I've heard some strange comparisons with my voice lately, Childish Gambino (when I'm yeling), Shizzy and now Illy, I get the Illy comparisons though ahaha. Thanks dude, not entirely happy with my delivery on this one but I wrote and recorded this in like half an hour hahah

Sun 3 Mar 2013 - 20:54

Check this out: https://soundcloud.com/ch453w/like-robots

This was from back in 2011, I just recently got back into making music. Quality isn't the best, since then I've gotten a much better mic, & set-up. I'll update with a more recent track once I record one.

Mon 4 Mar 2013 - 9:17

CHA53 wrote:Check this out: https://soundcloud.com/ch453w/like-robots

This was from back in 2011, I just recently got back into making music. Quality isn't the best, since then I've gotten a much better mic, & set-up. I'll update with a more recent track once I record one.

Since Buddie ain't be in this thread in a minute, I'll give you some quick feedback.

Firstly, I think you've got a good voice for this particular style of music, but - maybe it's just the mic quality - a lot of the time I couldn't understand what you were saying, but from what I heard I liked.

Drop more of your recently recorded stuff and I can give you some more feedback if you want/

Sat 30 Mar 2013 - 23:51

http://awgrime.bandcamp.com/

Sun 31 Mar 2013 - 3:33

AwDarkMusik wrote:http://awgrime.bandcamp.com/

Well, the first mistake you made is trying to sell Trap beats on Hopsin forums.

Fri 5 Apr 2013 - 3:30

I recorded this yesterday, feedback would be great!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_eA-hD4i3xQ&feature=youtu.be

Fri 5 Apr 2013 - 14:10

Perfect Stranger wrote:I recorded this yesterday, feedback would be great!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_eA-hD4i3xQ&feature=youtu.be

Interesting beat, I like the atmosphere of the whole song. Main thing you need to work on is overall flow and delivery though but it's an improvement from what I last saw of yours, good stuff hombre

Sun 7 Apr 2013 - 10:14

semaj116 wrote:

Perfect Stranger wrote:I recorded this yesterday, feedback would be great!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_eA-hD4i3xQ&feature=youtu.be

Interesting beat, I like the atmosphere of the whole song. Main thing you need to work on is overall flow and delivery though but it's an improvement from what I last saw of yours, good stuff hombre

Thanks for the feedback man :)
A lot of my stuff I don't write to beats, but some of it I did, but I see your overall point.
Much appreciated!