New song STS, looking for feedback

 This is the intro off my new mixtape STS dropping in a few weeks, I was looking for some feedback whether negative or positive. If you don't like it please don't just tell me go choke on dick and die, at least let me know what you didn't like about it and what I need to work on!

PS this picture is just the cover for the single I had someone draw up for me, not the actual mixtape cover.