Check this out please? Opinions appreciated!

What's up, Marcus here.

Anyway, I wrote this rap in the past 2 days, in my opinion it's aight, but I need you guys to check it out. Sadly, there are no vocals to the song because to be honest - My voice is terrible. I mumble and fuse together pronunciation, so until I get better at delivery I am not gonna rap it.

Please tell me what you think about the lyrics and the beat together, and how they would flow. I know you can't really tell the flow so well if there are no vocals, but please just give me some constructive critisizm.

Thanks in advanced!


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RSHD0o8MLfQ

Lyrics seem decent bro, just try spittin to the beat and reupload it.. its the only way you gonna get better man!

The second verse went well with the beat. I can't wait to hear you rap it when you get better with your delivery.

Cris J.A.C.K wrote:The second verse went well with the beat. I can't wait to hear you rap it when you get better with your delivery.

This. Keep it up!

Thanks yo, I will try to improve my delivery so I can rap it well and upload it!

Good to hear it, keep up at it.