New song Hopeless Dream

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w2xCczZQIWo

Fuck.
Some nice multies there, I'm impressed.
However, I'd like to see more concept wise not just like your dreams, haters etc.
How long ago was this written?
Also, do you buy and/or lease your beats?

Perfect Stranger wrote:Fuck.
Some nice multies there, I'm impressed.
However, I'd like to see more concept wise not just like your dreams, haters etc.
How long ago was this written?
Also, do you buy and/or lease your beats?

 Thanks bro :) um was written probably close to 3 months ago and recorded awhile back. 
and yup working on new material now

and I just download my beats for free lol

fxtdiilz wrote:

Perfect Stranger wrote:Fuck.
Some nice multies there, I'm impressed.
However, I'd like to see more concept wise not just like your dreams, haters etc.
How long ago was this written?
Also, do you buy and/or lease your beats?

 Thanks bro :) um was written probably close to 3 months ago and recorded awhile back. 
and yup working on new material now

Your lyricism is crazy good on this song.
Shoulda released this one earlier, haha.

Perfect Stranger wrote:

fxtdiilz wrote:

Perfect Stranger wrote:Fuck.
Some nice multies there, I'm impressed.
However, I'd like to see more concept wise not just like your dreams, haters etc.
How long ago was this written?
Also, do you buy and/or lease your beats?

 Thanks bro :) um was written probably close to 3 months ago and recorded awhile back. 
and yup working on new material now

Your lyricism is crazy good on this song.
Shoulda released this one earlier, haha.

Why would releasing it earlier matter? lol. and I would've but the killz guy took ages with his verse. and thanks bro

sick track dude, all i can say is work on delivery. the way you pronounce some words comes off forced(?). I can't tell if that's just your accent coming through though, other NZ hiphop I've heard doesn't sound like that. Not sure, make it sound less forced and you're all g.

semaj116 wrote:sick track dude, all i can say is work on delivery. the way you pronounce some words comes off forced(?). I can't tell if that's just your accent coming through though, other NZ hiphop I've heard doesn't sound like that. Not sure, make it sound less forced and you're all g.

 cool, thank you. and could you refer to a couple places so I know what parts you mean?

it's kinda throughout the whole thing i think? like, when you say contributions/begging for solutions, it sounds like there's a hint at an american accent or something. I really have no idea, it could just be how you speak normally bout it's coming off weird.

semaj116 wrote:it's kinda throughout the whole thing i think? like, when you say contributions/begging for solutions, it sounds like there's a hint at an american accent or something. I really have no idea, it could just be how you speak normally bout it's coming off weird.

 is it that I don't pronounce the words fully? like rush them a bit? I'm not really sure, could be accent. Do you have any other feedback?

fxtdiilz wrote:

semaj116 wrote:it's kinda throughout the whole thing i think? like, when you say contributions/begging for solutions, it sounds like there's a hint at an american accent or something. I really have no idea, it could just be how you speak normally bout it's coming off weird.

 is it that I don't pronounce the words fully? like rush them a bit? I'm not really sure, could be accent. Do you have any other feedback?

 More like you drag them out and it sounds kinda off, other then that not really. Ryhmescheme is good, time to move onto working on your songwriting.

I think it's a combination of both pronunciation and accent.

Anybody wanna help me with what eminem beat the violins at the start remind me of?

Skinny_Kid wrote:Anybody wanna help me with what eminem beat the violins at the start remind me of?

 oh fuck i know what you mean... Kill You?

semaj116 wrote:

Skinny_Kid wrote:Anybody wanna help me with what eminem beat the violins at the start remind me of?

 oh fuck i know what you mean... Kill You?

 nah that's not it

I kinda think the beat sounds similar to "It's all good now" lol

 
Still could be better though. It's not the best thing I ever heard,but it's decent. 6/10

Hopsinfan100 wrote: 
Still could be better though. It's not the best thing I ever heard,but it's decent. 6/10

is it bettr then little wayne