New song - "Better Days to Come"

I have just uploaded a new song called "Better Days to Come" that talks about drug addiction, teen pregnancy and drink driving. In the verse about drink driving I talk about my mate from school and also another girl being killed in an accident so yea the song is very real.

Please give it a listen and then some feedback

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QX1O_Hw6-00

some feedback please guys?

Dope
-Wiz

Cool
-Lil B

I like your messages in your songs, you seem like a very positive guy.

Coolguy 127 wrote:I like your messages in your songs, you seem like a very positive guy.

haha most the time, thanks bro. question, what'd you think of the hook? was my first attempt at singing on a song lol

"Better Days To Come" and you're talking about how Teenage girls shouldn't get pregnant cuz they're not ready/
I see what you did there, very clever.

You said you think that "Drugs are pointless" or something, what about prescription drugs? Have you ever been on medication or used other drugs?

I didn't really like the singing in the hook but the lyrics were really good in the verses and hook. But try not to fit to many words into one bar, particularly in the first verse you went off rhythm a couple of times.

8/10

I'm a genius aren't I? lol

When i said that i was talking about illegal drugs, hense why i went on to talk about girls working in the streets to pay for them and shit.. i wasn't talking about sleeping pills or panadol lol.

and yea im still bad at that but im still learning to write to a beat, i've written lyrics for 2 and a half years now and only since i've been on these forums have i ever tried writing to a beat, im still learning how to lol but I think I'm improving my flow, rhyme schemes, delivery and what not with every song tbh

^Word.
Your rhymes are heaps better, but your storytelling ability stands out heaps more, nearly on my level son
Kidding.

Perfect Stranger wrote:^Word.
Your rhymes are heaps better, but your storytelling ability stands out heaps more, nearly on my level son
Kidding.

hahaha one day maybe

but thanks bro, it's funny cus about the only thing i was good at in english was creative writing haha, guess it helps when it comes to my rapping

So are you guys collabing?

Coolguy 127 wrote:So are you guys collabing?

yup