My new song! FeedBakkPLZm8?

Sun 7 Apr 2013 - 10:18

This is my entry to the "CROOKS CYPHER CONTEST", admittedly my voice falls flat a bit but I've already had people tell me it's a big improvement so feel free to give mi sum of dat fedbakk lads?

Enjoy cunts.

Sun 7 Apr 2013 - 18:23

Yes it definitely is an improvement from you previous works. I think you're pretty good as a new artist. Oh yah by the way could you rap slower, I can't understand what you're sayin' cuz you're goin too fast. Lol just joking. The video is wierd...in a good way. If that makes sense. I got the word it's interesting. SwizZz 4

Mon 8 Apr 2013 - 3:02

Coolguy 127 wrote:Yes it definitely is an improvement from you previous works. I think you're pretty good as a new artist. Oh yah by the way could you rap slower, I can't understand what you're sayin' cuz you're goin too fast. Lol just joking. The video is wierd...in a good way. If that makes sense. I got the word it's interesting.

Srry i had tah brng dat choppa flo bruh.
I deliberately made my delivery aggressive and slow because I felt it fit the atmosphere pretty well, tbh.
Thanks, man. Recording is been kinda new to me over the past year and a half, especially actually putting stuff on the Internet, but I've been writing for about 3 years.
I like how it turned out, cheers for the feedback brotha!

Mon 8 Apr 2013 - 6:35

You are very flat when you rap bro, straight up this sounds like your talking for the most part with a bit of aggression behind the last words sometimes.. work on that a bit. good lyrics but your flow kinda reminds me of a tyler the creator type one.. just work on your delivery because a lot of it was just talking in a deep voice

Mon 8 Apr 2013 - 9:29

fxtdiilz wrote:You are very flat when you rap bro, straight up this sounds like your talking for the most part with a bit of aggression behind the last words sometimes.. work on that a bit. good lyrics but your flow kinda reminds me of a tyler the creator type one.. just work on your delivery because a lot of it was just talking in a deep voice

The thing is, if you notice when I actually speak at the end, that's how I actually sound, I only add the slight American-ish sounding delivery.
I wouldn't mind having a Tyler the Creator type flow, that wouldn't be so bad.

I'll take note of it though, I do full flat when doing the harmonizing shit a couple of times but I see what you mean.

Mon 8 Apr 2013 - 11:42

not trying to sound gay here, but you must have some big as fuck, low riding balls man cus your voice is deep as.. but still, you gotta go higher when you rap, listening to rap that deep gets kind of boring because its generally the same tone through it all.. haha i guess i just said that sounding like it was bad cus i dont like tyler but other people probably like it.

Mon 8 Apr 2013 - 11:43

was better than you other work though

Tue 9 Apr 2013 - 1:36

fxtdiilz wrote:not trying to sound gay here, but you must have some big as fuck, low riding balls man cus your voice is deep as.. but still, you gotta go higher when you rap, listening to rap that deep gets kind of boring because its generally the same tone through it all.. haha i guess i just said that sounding like it was bad cus i dont like tyler but other people probably like it.

Lol, shhhhh... Dizzy

I think I didn't try to go higher because I liked the atmosphere with the sort of low, whispery delivery but I see what you mean, on other tracks I reckon that might work, though.
I'll keep note of that next time I write a verse, cheers.

Tue 9 Apr 2013 - 1:46

Judge 1: A bit iffy but you are slowly making progress.

Judge 2: I see potential, you just need to find yourself.

Judge 3: You suck, do you even rap?

Judge 4: zOMG your the best like ever, you gonna be the next Eminem honey!

Judge 5: That was not good man sorry, but I wont give up on you yet..

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Which of these would be your favorite judge?

Tue 9 Apr 2013 - 1:50

I probably look in to your other work more than the other two people that posted and I prefer your other work because those beats fit you way better. But since this is a competition you don't have much of a choice. This beat sounds like a Clams Casino type and those don't really fit your hard style.

And aren't you 13 or 14?

Tue 9 Apr 2013 - 5:10

Essence wrote:I probably look in to your other work more than the other two people that posted and I prefer your other work because those beats fit you way better. But since this is a competition you don't have much of a choice. This beat sounds like a Clams Casino type and those don't really fit your hard style.

And aren't you 13 or 14?

Really? Interesting, you're actually the first person to say that.
I'll keep that in mind.
And yup.

White Knight sent me this btw,

White Knight wrote:When you were born did your mother take steroids and did that testosterone chemically enhance your sack which in turn caused your throat hole to produce unnaturally deep voice molecules?

Tue 9 Apr 2013 - 5:12

King wrote:Judge 1: A bit iffy but you are slowly making progress.

Judge 2: I see potential, you just need to find yourself.

Judge 3: You suck, do you even rap?

Judge 4: zOMG your the best like ever, you gonna be the next Eminem honey!

Judge 5: That was not good man sorry, but I wont give up on you yet..

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Which of these would be your favorite judge?

Because people that say this, usually live in their mothers basements and get picked on at school.

What's urs mi buday?

Tue 9 Apr 2013 - 6:59

Perfect Stranger wrote:

King wrote:Judge 1: A bit iffy but you are slowly making progress.

Judge 2: I see potential, you just need to find yourself.

Judge 3: You suck, do you even rap?

Judge 4: zOMG your the best like ever, you gonna be the next Eminem honey!

Judge 5: That was not good man sorry, but I wont give up on you yet..

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Which of these would be your favorite judge?

Because people that say this, usually live in their mothers basements and get picked on at school.

What's urs mi buday?

The plan was to try and get you to guess any one so I can also see the confidence you have in your own raps, I guess my plan failed though since you did not really take it seriously

I would pick number 1 for you.

Tue 9 Apr 2013 - 7:26

King wrote:J
I would pick number 1 for you.

Tue 9 Apr 2013 - 9:13

King wrote:

Perfect Stranger wrote:

King wrote:Judge 1: A bit iffy but you are slowly making progress.

Judge 2: I see potential, you just need to find yourself.

Judge 3: You suck, do you even rap?

Judge 4: zOMG your the best like ever, you gonna be the next Eminem honey!

Judge 5: That was not good man sorry, but I wont give up on you yet..

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Which of these would be your favorite judge?

Because people that say this, usually live in their mothers basements and get picked on at school.

What's urs mi buday?

The plan was to try and get you to guess any one so I can also see the confidence you have in your own raps, I guess my plan failed though since you did not really take it seriously

I would pick number 1 for you.

In all seriousness, probably 2 or 1.
This song was a bit rushed but I'm still relatively happy with it.

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